It was interesting to see what you did with building blocks. I noticed that a lot of the entries that stood out in Round 1 didn't make it to the finalist list in Round 2. I'm not sure why that is, but it was certainly noticeable.
Here are the entries that stood out in Round 2.
Dena Pawling 9:01am
Blitzen kicks me. Hard. “Why'd you pick THAT paper?”
“It was on top!” I splutter.
But he's right. What can we give four calling birds?
@%^!# North-Pole gift exchange.
“I know! Let's give them five gold rings.” I'm brilliant, thank you very much.
Blitzen snorts. “Ring their little necks is more like it.”
This just cracks me up.
Les Edgerton 9:21am
One day I found a volume of poetry by Robert Frost in the prison library at Pendleton and checked it out.
Back in my cell, I read: Home is the place where, when you want to go there, they have to take you in.
When I made parole, I gave my mom a ring to tell her my good news. I found out that my dad had never read Robert Frost.
At least not that poem.
I'm a sucker for what I think of as spiderweb stories: what's important is what isn't said (as in the space between the filaments of the web.) This is a great example of that. My only quibble is with the last line. I'd have revised that out.
Amy Schaefer 11:03am
What would it mean, to eat the bird? I glanced nervously around my fiancé’s family. Heads cocked, beady eyes watchful, like a flock of birds themselves.
I took a bite.
She took a bite.
You’re so relieved, you nearly tip your wine glass. Food matters, here.
You pull the ring from your pocket.
I love changes in POV within a story. This one is done with great dexterity.
Dazed in the ring, hate cleared my head. I can legally kill my ex’s live-in. Hard right. Neck snapped. Won a championship belt for murder.
I'm just in awe of the depth evoked in so few words.
Beth Carpenter 2:46pm
Swans? Now? With a foot of ice on the lakes? Way too many birds in this stupid song. Wait – got it. Seven Swanson dinners swimming in gravy. Next…
Grumman Goose – the quintessential sea plane. National Guard has six of the belly-landers lying, not laying, in the snow. Close enough. Which brings us to…
It's the "lying, not laying" that just cracked me up here. I'm not a big fan of the hanging sentences at the end though.
More to come!