I received the following feed back from an agent:
Thank you for your query of (title). Although your story is intriguing, it needs another level of line editing. If you agree and complete the edits, feel free to re-query this project.
Since it would have been dumb of me to not take this advice to heart, I immediately began editing. It's been 6 weeks, I've eliminated about 3000 words (I'm not going to lie, a large number of them were 'that'!) and am ready to re-query.
My question is, how do I go about this? Do I just send the query again with my edited material in place of the original? Do I tell the agent it's a re-submission? If so, in the body of the e-mail or the subject line? Also, do I need to rework my query letter itself or do I leave it as is?
All of my responses so far have been of the 'thanks, but no thanks' variety, so I'm kind of flying blind here. Any advice would be greatly appreciated.
I can see why you jumped on this with all four feet. It must have felt like finding a storm celler in a tornado to get that reply.
I've sent replies like that VERY infrequently. The number one thing that messes up your second chance? Replying too soon.
Six weeks is BARELY enough time. Another line edit doesn't mean just paring out those extra words, but that's a good start.
It means letting the manuscript sit for a month. (I can hear you wailing from here when I say that) THEN going back and reading it out loud, very slowly and making sure every single word is the right word and in the right place.
Once you've done that, you're ready to requery.
Here's how you do that:
Subject line: requery per your email of (date agent replied to you)
Dear Agent Stormy Celler:
Thanks for offering me the chance to requery after a line edit for my novel TORNADO TANGO. I've completed the line edit. Here's the original query with the revised pages.
FIRST 3-5 REVISED pages (or whatever Agent Storym Celler) asks for.
Please please please do not let impatience get the better of you. It's the number two query killer. The first is plain bad writing so you're ahead of the crowd. Don't blow your chance here.