I just received the following from an agent to whom I had sent a query in early November:
"Please know I carefully considered your project, but I don't feel I can offer representation at this time... This is an accomplished story, and you’re a talented writer, but your pages need further editing, and the beginning could be reworked so that it is more compelling."
I agree with the need to make the beginning more compelling. In fact, a few weeks after submitting the query, I had an epiphany, and DID re-work the beginning to make it (I think) far more compelling.
Question: after thanking the agent profusely and buttering her up sufficiently, is it worth mentioning this in a reply email? Am I reading too much into the "at this time" phrase by thinking that she would be interested in a follow-up / revision? This particular agent is pretty high on my list, by the way, so I was excited to get a thoughtful response.
I get this a lot. I'm getting more of it now with Chum Bucket. It's
Since it's impossible, I won't waste time telling you not to do it.
Instead, here's how to do it effectively:
Thank you for your helpful comments on (date) about my manuscript (title.) In fact, I had an epiphany about the same problem in the manuscript as you were considering it, and I have revised along the lines you suggested. Would you be willing to take another look at the same number of pages you read before? Thank you very much for your time and special consideration. Your chum, Writer
Be prepared for a vast swath of silence because it's easier to say nothing than say no.
I generally take a look at a couple pages when asked to re-consider something but that's it since this was not a requested revision.
These kinds of helpful comments from agents are often just a few of the things they think need work. In other words, you've got long ass sentences and too much description but I haven't yet mentioned that I detest the plot, cause at least if you fix the sentences and the excess description you'll be better off with another agent who may not hate the plot at all.