Example: "She wore six-inch slingbacks on her feet."
Where else is she going to wear them? Her head?
Go through your manuscript sentence by sentence to make sure you're not "wearing shoes on your feet." You might be delightfully surprised by how much more lean and elegant your prose is.
Adrenaline coursed through her veins (I'm glad it wasn't coursing out her ears)
Adrenaline coursed through her
She drove her car to the office (probably because her broom was in the shop)
Take out every word you don't need.
Sometimes you may need to say she drove her car, or adrenaline coursed through her veins, but that should be something you choose to put in, not the default way you write.
[One of the best places to practice this kind of spare writing is twitter. With only 140 characters, you have to be lean. Don't "cheat" with abbreviations--pare down!]
And give yourself a break on this: everyone everyone everyone over-writes on the initial draft. That's why God invented revisions. Don't kick yourself for writing like this; save the kicking for not finding it on the second pass.
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