tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-17040756.post6883226699602041613..comments2024-03-29T07:29:32.276-04:00Comments on Janet Reid, Literary Agent: Treasure Chest writing contest results-preliminary!/FINALJanet Reidhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/00615380335938685231noreply@blogger.comBlogger98125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-17040756.post-892315469296007092016-02-23T14:35:48.353-05:002016-02-23T14:35:48.353-05:00
LynnRodz
Loved yours.<br />LynnRodz<br /><br />Loved yours.french sojournhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14262858704848580714noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-17040756.post-628279574161855742016-02-23T11:28:53.924-05:002016-02-23T11:28:53.924-05:00Luciakaku: Very well put! I thought your story was...Luciakaku: Very well put! I thought your story was well written, and I'm glad it got a mention. Janet mentioned last week how important it is to evoke feeling with words, and your story did that very well. It's something I am still working on.Karen McCoyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02640324898284007337noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-17040756.post-46227710885460581492016-02-23T08:28:49.941-05:002016-02-23T08:28:49.941-05:00Thank you very much for that. I really appreciate ...Thank you very much for that. I really appreciate it.I also feel I'm not there yet, but I think all writers feel that. We just need to keep going.This is a good place to learn, so glad I've found it. PS.I liked your wordplay/rhythm. Marie McKayhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11405271051226910312noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-17040756.post-90032323912956820092016-02-22T23:53:43.664-05:002016-02-22T23:53:43.664-05:00Karen, I think that was about that particular entr...Karen, I think that was about that particular entry. It <i>was</i> a story because of what the reader filled in. So, if you didn't "get it" enough to fill in the blanks, maybe you thought it wasn't a story. <br /><br />Also, thank you so much for the compliment! *blush* <br /><br />However, mine being marked "not quite a story" means that it lacked something. (In true woodland critter form, I spent a few hours last night fretting over whether or not me questioning that came off as whining that I didn't win or something, when in fact I'd like to know so I can avoid repeating whatever mistake I made. In similar form, I'd like to clarify that I'm quite pleased with myself for breaking the Shark's black heart. Bwaha~) <br /><br />Seconding Colin that getting an explanation now and then on what's missing from one of the not-a-stories might help us learn how to quit it. Not unlike Query Shark--it's not just reading a bunch of stories that tells us what to do, it's reading what's wrong with the ones that don't work. Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-17040756.post-89771866482176739112016-02-22T23:32:28.625-05:002016-02-22T23:32:28.625-05:00Thank you, scary! I'm glad you liked it. :)Thank you, scary! I'm glad you liked it. :)Colin Smithhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03292997431935215499noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-17040756.post-86381174321120629642016-02-22T23:01:12.332-05:002016-02-22T23:01:12.332-05:00I am very new at this but my favorite was Colin Sm...I am very new at this but my favorite was Colin Smith 10:13am <br /><br />Mainly because it was a proper story, whereas I felt that there were some of them just playing with words for the sake of using them, if that makes sense. Some came across pretentious, trying too hard to appear original…some were all about how they split those words in tricky, clever way…But there were just a few that I thought were great as proper, self-contained, beautiful pieces of flash fiction.scaryazerihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08209595384194222929noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-17040756.post-51478426777925610322016-02-22T21:31:52.325-05:002016-02-22T21:31:52.325-05:00Now that I've had a chance to sit down, my fir...Now that I've had a chance to sit down, my first comment still stands. I agree with the winner. I didn't see the Smith part. I'm catching on. Just Jan made me paranoid, but after reading it through a few times I saw how it had layers of story. I was impressed. Same with Amy Schaefer. The one I liked the most right off was Marie Mackay. I'm not sophisticated enough, yet, to comment on the technical parts of the writing but I do like Women getting back stories, solving their nasty problems on their own. I also enjoyed the others with this theme. Just one of those things. I also thought Marie Mckay's might make a good short story. <br /><br />I have just started reading the comments more closely and there is much insight there. Today: Elegance in less. Still need to study that. Person not character. Story not just a scene. Sorry I didn't take notes as read I through. But you know who you are!<br /><br />You guys are great. I wish I had more to give back right now, but I'm just not there yet. And of course, the hostess is the mostess. <br /><br />From recent experience I wouldn't assume college will teach you to write. I agree with an un-noted commentator (sorry!) that reading and writing are the best ways. And the Wells Fargo Wagon Master. If you're still standing at the station when it pulls out. Get back to work (I tell myself.) Thank you!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-17040756.post-46086079694033910152016-02-22T21:19:09.345-05:002016-02-22T21:19:09.345-05:00Congrats, Sara, well done!
Susan, your comment ma...Congrats, Sara, well done!<br /><br />Susan, your comment made my day! Thank you for sharing that with me. And thanks Angie, as well, for the mention.<br /><br />John, loved your comment at 2:47.<br /><br />I'm taking this jet lagged body to bed now.<br /><br />LynnRodzhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10796099106913990163noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-17040756.post-6554636084685706172016-02-22T21:02:41.800-05:002016-02-22T21:02:41.800-05:00Great entry, Sara.
And that marvelous Carkoon pho...Great entry, Sara.<br /><br />And that marvelous Carkoon phone call....Theresahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18165072684559960801noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-17040756.post-32573903866487501652016-02-22T20:22:24.934-05:002016-02-22T20:22:24.934-05:00Congratulations to everyone, but especially Sara. ...Congratulations to everyone, but especially Sara. What a marvelous group of entries and short rounds.<br /><br />Good job. This place is getting serious. Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-17040756.post-86155212527132050492016-02-22T20:02:10.622-05:002016-02-22T20:02:10.622-05:00Congratulations, Sara! I loved your story. Absol...Congratulations, Sara! I loved your story. Absolutely fantastic!Claire Bobrowhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15666082441972111293noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-17040756.post-12344728638300384352016-02-22T19:57:53.956-05:002016-02-22T19:57:53.956-05:00Congratulations to Sara H. Well done indeed. And a...Congratulations to Sara H. Well done indeed. And also to the listers and mentions. Scary competition. Get thee to an agent! Quickly! Thank you, Ms. Janet, for taking the extra time and effort for such a splendid contest.Lancehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17335923263777449916noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-17040756.post-37954904798610408382016-02-22T19:21:25.053-05:002016-02-22T19:21:25.053-05:00Thanks, Mark! I liked your entry, too. Definitely ...Thanks, Mark! I liked your entry, too. Definitely stood out-I love punctuation/grammar humor! :)Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05212475020884676350noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-17040756.post-81322563732752349612016-02-22T18:47:13.790-05:002016-02-22T18:47:13.790-05:00Congrats, Sara!
And wow, look at all the excitem...Congrats, Sara! <br /><br />And wow, look at all the excitement that went on here when I wasn't around. Lisa Bodenheimhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17809067722921953857noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-17040756.post-31957335698794602342016-02-22T18:34:44.275-05:002016-02-22T18:34:44.275-05:00FYI: I have updated the Writing Contest spreadshee...FYI: I have updated the Writing Contest spreadsheet in the <a href="http://www.colindsmith.com/TreasureChest/" rel="nofollow">Treasure Chest</a>.Colin Smithhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03292997431935215499noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-17040756.post-575276602612941662016-02-22T18:30:11.908-05:002016-02-22T18:30:11.908-05:00Congrats to Sara!!! Thanks so much for your story ...Congrats to Sara!!! Thanks so much for your story it was amazing! <br /><br />And thanks to everyone for your kind words and encouragement. I'm off to read Elements of Style. See you in a week or two.<br /><br />-JasonAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-17040756.post-17762392380944908612016-02-22T18:10:29.193-05:002016-02-22T18:10:29.193-05:00Hey Frain hahahahahahaha.
Don't send her any C...Hey Frain hahahahahahaha.<br />Don't send her any Christian stuff.<br /><br />Amy, I'll have the latrines clean by the time your passengers arrive.Carolynnwith2Nshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18394998702410764388noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-17040756.post-15823721686457814272016-02-22T18:05:38.641-05:002016-02-22T18:05:38.641-05:00First of all, I was shocked, SHOCKED, that I made ...First of all, I was shocked, <i>SHOCKED</i>, that I made Janet's short list. I've been very busy lately because my daughter had another baby. (Her first is a freshman in high school.) I hadn't planned on writing anything until I thought of Chesterfield cigarettes for the prompt word chest. Even then, it was a very last minute thing. So thank you, Janet, for including mine on your short list.<br /><br />The entries were outstanding. Congrats to all, especially to <b>Sara Halle</b>!Kittyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09868642232827730189noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-17040756.post-80301901111434356512016-02-22T18:00:37.826-05:002016-02-22T18:00:37.826-05:00Congratulations to Sara for a job well done. I am...Congratulations to Sara for a job well done. I am honored to be on the short list today, especially when the competition is so fierce! Just Janhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12546035917149403735noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-17040756.post-64425152013765995632016-02-22T17:59:53.756-05:002016-02-22T17:59:53.756-05:00Congrats, Sara! All very good entries!! Thanks, ...Congrats, Sara! All very good entries!! Thanks, Janet :) <br /><br />Jason - I understand completely. These folks are great writers, and sometimes I have similar thoughts. But I have learned that art isn't something you can truly compare. Whether with FF or in the 'real world,' you might write one thing that REALLY speaks to a group of people. Others may never 'see' it, but it's still invaluable to that group. There have been a few entries that haven't won, but I still think about sometimes because those 100 words left a mark on me. If it's your passion, I think you should keep writing. Lennon Farishttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03570629350169504234noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-17040756.post-2609489392927988352016-02-22T17:44:45.642-05:002016-02-22T17:44:45.642-05:006 Just Jan's story: Yes, I did get the subtle...6 Just Jan's story: Yes, I did get the subtleness, but only because I am familiar with the supertext.<br /><br />Nice werewolf story, with the conflict between the investigator's role of seeker of justice, and being the cause of injustice.<br /><br />8 Nate Wilson's entry. This is the one that displayed the use of dual meanings for me in a word: the chasm, then linked with fissure to abyss. Elegantly subtle, which is why it works so well. <br /><br />I'm starting to get the vibe of how the entries are judged and what makes them good works. I'm going to have to play with this phrase-level structure more. This sort of thing often gets forgotten when one is used to cranking out long form novels. Wondering if I could write a longer work and maintain the multi-level structure this kind of writing embodies? This extra level of meaning may be the thing to lift my own works from "yeah, okay" to "holy fuckamoly" stage.<br /><br />Congrats Sara Halle! The poetic structure really worked for me.<br /><br />Took me a while to figure out what made 9 Kitty's entry work, but I got it in the end after a brief explanation of who the mayor was (says the Sandgroper). Still, five reads to figure otu the mayor's tab.<br /><br />Much what makes these stories work is what the reader brings to the tale. If I wasn't familiar with the myth of a werewolf, I would not have gotten the significance of the phases of the Moon, just as I didn't get the connection of the Mayor's tab until someone enlightened me with the smoking laws of New York City.<br /><br />It's not that the info is missing from the story; the clues are there, if the reader knows how to interpret them. That is the difference between missing info and subtle info, and a mark of the mastery of the craft.<br /><br />I've been so focused on trying to tell the story in plain text. It seems I need to stop trying to shove a 5K word story arch into 100lb rock and start looking at how that 100lb rock is a keystone instead. <br /><br />I confess I'm chuffed for my first listing, ne'er mind short listing, evah. Evidence I'm figuring it out?<br /><br />Just googled Benelli. Oh. What a clever play on words! At first I thought the brake lines to the motorcycle had been cut.<br /><br />Kate Higgins: Now that would be a twist, with the stories requiring a positive conclusion, if not an acutal HEA.Her Grace, Heidi, the Duchess of Knealehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17818060864422019573noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-17040756.post-19956084318782184522016-02-22T17:42:43.715-05:002016-02-22T17:42:43.715-05:00Janet, I'll be returning to Floating Mobile Pa...Janet, I'll be returning to Floating Mobile Paradise in three weeks, and at that time can offer an inexpensive one-way ferry service to Carkoon. Places are limited, so book early!Amy Schaeferhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17263719891092841767noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-17040756.post-280970391453267782016-02-22T17:02:18.780-05:002016-02-22T17:02:18.780-05:00I'm really late getting to the blog today, but...I'm really late getting to the blog today, but congratulations Sara and everyone mentioned. Another great batch of entries, and I love seeing all the different ways we use the prompt words!Cindy Chttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13196306055833459983noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-17040756.post-52066582442980627202016-02-22T17:01:11.944-05:002016-02-22T17:01:11.944-05:00Congratulations Sara.
My Queen had to look up Ben...Congratulations Sara.<br /><br />My Queen had to look up Benelli? The makers of the greatest sporting shotguns, tactical shotguns and breeching shotguns? Wow.Craig Fhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07157301156577795781noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-17040756.post-25326775652391019682016-02-22T17:00:42.197-05:002016-02-22T17:00:42.197-05:00The Colin-Janet-John-Colin byplay is a sterling ex...The Colin-Janet-John-Colin byplay is a sterling example of why I read the comments. I agree with Colin, and nominate John's line of 2:47 as a subheader. <br /><br />Angie, thanks for the mention. I'm glad my twisty bride/widow worked for you.<br /><br />Love you all. Aannnndddd... that's my third comment of the day. Peace out!<br /><br />CeliaAnonymousnoreply@blogger.com